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   A girl surfaced from the cool,secretive waters that had been colored darkly by the night.The light of the full moon gave vision to her deep-set purple eyes and shone off her colorful...tail.For she was no human girl but a Mermaid. She looked ahead to the island,knowing to avoid it and wondering what sort of lunatics were inhabiting it now,when something caught her eye. Curiously she swam up closer to the floating lights ahead.

A mass of glowing beings floated in the sea,carrying a figure towards her.It had wild,tangled hair,was flithy,bruised and cut with swelling,scrawny,covered with sand,and didn't seem Human at first glance. Originally,the boy appeared to be dead,however his chest rose and fell and he was muttering something about a "beast". As she touched his wrist panicked thoughts flooded out of his head into hers.
"Fancy thinking the Beast was something you could kill!"
  The girl's stomach twisted itself like a snake at the sight of the disembodied,decomposing swine head.How was it talking,though?
  
"Kill the beast! Cut his throat! Spill his blood! Do him in!"
 The boy had been stabbed,bitten,scratched,thrown off a cliff and left for dead.

Her eyes widen,so much pain caused by the very people he was trying help.Why did he try to help people like them? She did not care how young those little monsters were,what kind of person would do that? It was also apparent he might just have a gift and either way his time was running low.The mermaid realized what she must do,gently she pushed him down under high tide.She took a deep breath,no she couldn't! Why was this so hard,gift or no gift she couldn't just leave him.One glance at the selfless,courageous boy and she had to,besides it wouldn't count,would it? The girl opened her mouth and quickly gave him a peck on his lips and his lower body was surrounded by a glowing gold fog...
I must warn you that while this is written in Golding's style,I forgot to do the same for the other chapters.

Partly inspired by the legend that a kiss from a mermaid at the bottom of the ocean will turn you into a merman.Guess what's going to happen to Simon? Besides what I just told you.

~ Title:A Curious Island
~ Author:Unicornomics
~ Rating:Chapter:K-PG
~Whole work: PG-13

~ Pairing(s):None Yet
~ Summary:In which Simon is saved by a mermaid.
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Chel-Bells Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow, this is really interesting so far! I love it. :love:
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unicornomics Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013   General Artist
Glad to hear that,thank you for reading
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:iconchel-bells:
Chel-Bells Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Student General Artist
You're so welcome. :D
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HeatherSchoff Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist
Awesome beginning, you are a very good writer! You should try to publish it down the road! :la:
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unicornomics Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013   General Artist
Thanks but it's fanfiction
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HeatherSchoff Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist
Interesting! Still good job though! :)
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unicornomics Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013   General Artist
Thanks for reading
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MaidenStar Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
First off, I really like your beginning. It really drew me in, and scanning down, can see the many exclamation marks. Too many isn't good, but you had just the right amount to catch my attention, but not so much as to muddle the whole thing. Good job!

The only thing I would suggest here is to refine your punctuation usage. Other than that, the action and description are nicely played out. Keep it up, and you'll most certainly improve! ^-^

*MaidenStar
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unicornomics Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013   General Artist
Thank you for your time and thought out comment
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MaidenStar Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're very welcome! All you need to do is to polish up on the minor grammar mistakes. Otherwise, you're fine!
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